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| Author | The Dying Soul : Discussion, Ideas, Suggestion, Comments |
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The story 'The Dying Soul' is up and will be back soon on Lordswm.com. The link to the story (in the OGF) will be posted here as soon as the story is uploaded there. Thanks to several ideas, suggestions and comments I received, I was able to make the story a lot more better, and interesting to read. I am sure that you will find this story very much engrossing and entertaining. Watch out for the story!
This thread is the sole place for the discussing the story and placing your ideas, suggestions and other comments regarding the story. None such posts shall be entertained in the main story thread. I will not be posting the whole story in one go, it'll be posted chapter-wise over a short period of time (most probably a period of one day). | | Chapters 1, 2 and 3 posted. More soon coming up... | | its awesome! | | cant wait for CHAPTER5 | | i too cant wait | sorry to post with multi
but its awesome | | Oops I posted my message there.....really really sorry, read 1st post later :( | Glad you are liking it. More chapters uploaded.
for narutoayan:
its ok. I have asked for that post to be deleted. | By the way, this is the link to the story:
https://www.lordswm.com/forum_messages.php?tid=1917459
Chapter 5 is posted.
Please REFRAIN from posted in the story thread. Post here instead. | Posted chapter 6.
I hope you guys really enjoy the story. I am not an author, aged 15, but my passion is writing, and I really enjoy doing so. My last version of the story got some great critisism and I must tell you, it has really helped me make my story better and more interesting than ever. Thanks to the recurring support of all you guys. | | Apologies to GOGOGOG for having his comment removed from the story thread. Your comment was very encouraging, thanks, but I am really sorry to remove that as it was in between my story. Please write here instead in future. Thanks for your appreciation. | Not too shabby a story, pretty interesting. However, in the future, you seriously need to read through your own story. I'm assuming you didn't do that because I can spot numerous grammatical errors.
This isn't whining or anything but any respectable piece of literature or any published works for that matter are always thoroughly vetted to ensure maximum grammatical clarity and precision. You're pretty lucky most of your readers here do not have full mastery of English grammar (No offense to anyone, guys), else you'd really be catching some heat. If you do not have great command of English grammar, then I think you should have some friends or your teachers assist you in making sure your story is as grammatically accurate as possible.
That aside, I'm glad that you enjoy writing and have decided to share your creativity and imagination with the rest of the LWM community. Not many people choose or dare to put up their own works and share it. :D
PS: Try not to swear too much or too heavily, this game does have many children as players.
PPS: Oh dear, I may be becoming a Grammar Nazi... | | hi vlaer, I am really happy seeing your improvement.You did took into consideration what others suggested and you worked hard on it.This version is much better than the previous one as I said you were capable of delivering better:) | for joechue: I had read it once, but might have left out. If you could point those mistakes, i'd be glad.
for blazingarpit: yup, your suggestion did spark me on to write something better and more interesting to read | | cud i get a link of the older thread just wanted to read | cud i get a link of the older thread just wanted to read
I had deleted it and made it fresh one instead :)
After I made this, I feel the last one was a piece of junk :) | | yup, you are right. I missed quite of them. But I hope they don't make much of a problem in reading the entire story. Will be careful in future.
some of what you have pointed out, like point 5 were intentional, to make it look informal, just like we normally talk with our friends. For point 9, yes, it was pleas, a big mistake.
point 9- its not all your troubles, just all troubles. This is because the swordsman says the child has been troublesome not just for the family, but for the Empire as a whole as it is because of him that the couple are unable to pay their taxes.
yes, there were some errors, thanks for pointing them out. Would be more careful with my editing in future. The point 9, 'pleads' instead of 'pleas' is embarrassing, I apologize everyone for this grave mistake. Thanks joechue for the time you have taken to help me out. | | Nah, it's fine. The thing is that these errors are minor in the sense that they do not impair anyone's ability to read and understand the story. However, it does affect the viewer's impression of you (the author) and the story as a whole. Anyway, I'm glad that you put this story up for all of us to read. :D | Nah, it's fine. The thing is that these errors are minor in the sense that they do not impair anyone's ability to read and understand the story. However, it does affect the viewer's impression of you (the author) and the story as a whole. Anyway, I'm glad that you put this story up for all of us to read. :D
Yup, does affect an author's impression as a whole. I am having very less time at my disposal, so get very less time to cross-check. Sorry to all guys. I hope that you find this an interesting read... |
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